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第30章 各种作文题型写作(3)

Why the world is is getting smaller and smaller? For one thing, modem technology has created various means of transportation. And they are more and more available. Buses, planes and taxis are found in most cities of the world. They deliver goods and take passengers to and from every corner of the world. For another thing, with the development of modern society, people are in contact with one another more frequently. Everyday we must deal with a lot of people unknown to us before. The more advanced a society is, the more contacts we make with others.

So we can draw the conclusion that so long as technology makes progress, the world will grow smaller and smaller.

评析:本文切题,思想表达清楚,文字通顺,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误。

五、记叙类作文

记叙类作文在四级考试中考得不多,仅在2003年6月和9月的考试中连续考了两次。但是这两篇文章的体裁并不是单纯的记叙文,其中都掺杂了说明或议论部分,因此在考试中特别要注意这种混合类的文章。

单纯的记叙文就是以记叙人物的经历或事物发展变化过程为主的一种文章。记叙文有六要素,即时间、地点、人物和事件的起因、经过及结果。一篇记叙文只要把这些要素写清楚,就会内容具体,眉目清晰,中心意思明确。一般情况下,这六要素中的人物、时间、地点作为开端,要写在文章的开头。事件、原因常作为记叙文的段落发展,又称为文章的主题部分,应该放在文章的中间。结果作为记叙文的结局常放在文章的末尾处。

记叙文有三种表现形式:①以人物为主,围绕人物组织材料;②以事物为中心,围绕事件组织材料或围绕事件写人;③以写景状物和描写为主。

从叙述的内容来看,一篇记叙文应注意交代清楚事情的始末及细节,即何时、何地、何事、何人及何因(when,where,what,who,why and how),做到有条有理,使读者易于明白。

1.事件

为了引起读者的注意,可以从一些纠纷或交叉事件中展开,直到高潮出现,再将问题解决。

2.人物

集中主要人物的描写,记叙人物遇到的事情及其对人物有什么影响。

3.时态

一般多采用一般过去时。

一般来讲,记叙文的叙述线索可分为以下几种:①以时问为线索,按时间的顺序来展开;②以地点的转移为顺序来展开;③以事件发展的过程为线索,或以人物出现的先后次序来展开;④以事物的象征意义为线索来展开;⑤以人物的思想行为及认知的过程为线索来展开。

要写好一篇记叙文,应注意的事项有:

1.明确写作目的

写文章的目的就是确切表达一个中心思想,文章的一切内容应自始至终为展开中心服务。

2.选择细节材料

选择好的细节材料就是为了更好地表现主题,所选择的材料要有代表性、典型性,写作内容要详略得当,主要情节应详细写,次要内容要简略或概述。写人物,一般要把某人的年龄、外貌和性格特征、人物行为、工作业绩、心理活动等方面简要概括出来,同时要略加点评或感想;事件是记叙的核心,往往有它的起因、经过和结局。写事件要比较详细地交代事情的来龙去脉,同时要重点突出,表达精练,防止渲染。

3.恰当地选择写作方法

记叙文的写作方法就是指写作的顺序,文章先写什么,后写什么都要有一定的顺序。最常见的写作方法有两种:顺叙和倒叙。顺叙是按照客观事物的发生、发展的先后顺序进行叙述;倒叙是把事件的结局或事件中最突出的片段提到文章的开头来叙述,然后再按事件的发展顺序进行叙述(详见6.1节)。

下面以2003年6月的四级作文为例。

Directions:For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write an eye-witness account of a traffic accident. You should write at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:

假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸,就此写一份见证书。见证书须包括以下几点:

(1)车祸发生的时间及地点。

(2)你所见到的车祸情况。

(3)你对车祸原因的分析。

范文1

An Eye-Witness Account of a Traffic Accident

At 9:00 a.m. on last Saturday morning, I saw a traffic accident on Nanjing road. At that time,I was on my way to school.

When I turned on the corner, two taxis were severely damaged. One was red, and there are two persons in it. The other was yellow. The door of the yellow taxi was knocked down and lay on the road. Two passengers in it were slightly injured. One driver was bleeding and the other was shut in the taxi. As soon as I saw that, I called 110. The traffic police arrived in a few minutes.

According to what I saw, I thought there may be one possible reasons leading to the accident. That was the yellow taxi kept too short a distance from the red one. When the red taxi slowed down, the yellow one couldn"t slow down in time. So the accident took place.

评析:根据四级作文评分标准,这是一篇8分段的文章。首先,本文基本切题,思想表达比较清楚,基本能够对车祸现场进行详细的描述,对事故原因的推断也较为符合情理;其次,文字连贯性不强,尤其是第二段,缺少一些必要的衔接词。简单句太多,可以考虑把一些简单句合并成复合句;最后,这篇作文语言错误较多。如one driver和the other指代不清,one driver改为the driver of the yellow taxi.

范文2

An Eye-Witness Account of a Traffic Accident

My name is Li Ming. I am studying at a technical college. A week ago I saw a traffic accident, which is still vivid in my mind even now.

It was at about 9:00 on Saturday morning, June 15th, when I went out of the university to visit a friend at another university. I was walking leisurely on the sidewalk when I heard a loud crash of two vehicles just at the Tjunction about 10 meters away. Two taxis crashed together. It was a traffic accident.

I went up and found that the two taxis were badly damaged. Both hoofs were out of shape. One door of a car was knocked off and lay on the road. One driver was bleeding and the other was shut in the taxis. Some people were trying to help the driver get out of the damaged ear. One man was calling to the traffic police station. A lot of cars were jammed on the road.

From the stopping track on the road, it is clear that the two taxis were driving too fast. But it is just one of the reasons. In my opinion, the taxi drivers were eager to take more passengers and made more money. On the other hand, both drivers didn"t show concern for one another. Both of them wanted to run in front of the other.

Therefore, the accident is inevitable. So far, we should let the drivers keep it in their mind that a little slower, a little safer. Taking care of other"s lives means taking care of your own life.

评析:本文切题,思想表达清楚,文字通顺,连贯性较好,基本上无语言错误。

范文3

An Eye-Witness Account of A Traffic Accident

Yesterday evening, I rode to a small supermarket at about 7:00. I happened to witness the car accident when I got near the front of that supermarket. And it was about 7:15.

I saw a white car crashing into the back of a red one in the very front of the supermarket, when all the passengers gathered around the accident spot. So I had to struggle my way through the crowd and saw the two cars were damaged obviously, the white one"s head scratched and the red one"s end broken. Certainly, the two drivers were quarreling about who should be responsible for the car accident.

I am not sure who should be accused of the accident, for it happened in the twinkling of an eye. I take it that the accident may be due to the white car driver"s lack of experience, or he might be drunk that evening. Another possibility is that the red car driver braked suddenly for a certain reason, while the white car driver had no time to make immediate reaction at avoid crashing into it.

六、解释说明类作文

解释说明类作文的题目主要要求作者根据提纲所给的线索,对某个事物或某种现象进行分析或解释,有时还要求提出解决问题的途径,常用的句式如We should take some effective measures, We should try our best to overcome the difficulties; we should do our utmost in doing sth, we should solve the problems that we are confronted with来表示措施。

以2001年1月的四级作文为例。

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic How to Succeed in a Job Interview? You should write at least 100 words, and base your composition the outline in Chinese below:

(1)面试在求职过程中的作用。

(2)取得面试成功的因素:仪表、举止谈吐、能力、专业知识、自信、实事求是……

范文1

How to Succeed in a Job Interview?

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